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This morning my brother and I biking to 中寮山, and we made a big circle in the Kaosiung rural place, from our home to 中寮山, then slid down to 斜張橋 and 佛光山, turn right to 義大世界, in the end we pass 仁武 and returned home. It was quite a ride that we spent 2 hours and 30 miniutes, rode 70 kilometers and ascended 670 meters in total, there were some steep slopes in the riding, and I overcome them very properly so that my brother made compliments to me, for a person who first time riding this route and without a pair of cycling shoes, the performance is better than expected. Finally, I want to appreciate to my brother, he gave me some useful helps and made me felt confidence while facing slopes, and I would like to cycling with him next time, exploring the beauty of cycling and fabulous scenary.
✅ 修正版
This morning my brother and I went biking to 中寮山, and we made a big circle in the Kaohsiung countryside. From our home we rode to 中寮山, then slid down to 斜張橋 and 佛光山, turned right to 義大世界, and in the end passed 仁武 before returning home.
It was quite a ride—we spent 2 hours and 30 minutes, rode 70 km, and ascended 670 m in total. There were some steep slopes along the way, and I overcame them well, so my brother even gave me compliments. For someone riding this route for the first time and without cycling shoes, my performance was better than expected.
Finally, I want to thank my brother. He gave me a lot of useful help and made me feel confident when facing the slopes. I would like to go cycling with him again next time, exploring the joy of cycling and the beautiful scenery.
🔎 改錯重點
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biking to → went biking to:要加動詞完成句子。
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Kaosiung → Kaohsiung:拼字。
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miniutes → minutes:拼字。
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turn right → turned right:時態要一致(過去式)。
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pass 仁武 → passed 仁武:同樣過去式。
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for a person who first time riding → for someone riding … for the first time:語法修正。
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made me felt confidence → made me feel confident:feel 用原形。
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appreciate to my brother → thank my brother:正確搭配是 thank,appreciate to 錯誤。
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scenary → scenery:拼字。
今天早上我和哥哥一起去騎腳踏車到中寮山,我們繞了一大圈高雄的鄉間:從家裡出發到中寮山,再一路滑下到斜張橋和佛光山,接著右轉往義大世界,最後經過仁武再回到家。
這真是一趟很精彩的旅程──我們花了 2 小時 30 分鐘,總共騎了 70 公里,上升高度達到 670 公尺。沿途有一些陡坡,但我成功克服了它們,所以哥哥還特地稱讚我。對於第一次挑戰這條路線、而且沒有穿專業卡鞋的人來說,我的表現比預期還要好。
最後,我很感謝哥哥,他在途中給了我很多幫助,也讓我在面對陡坡時更有信心。我很期待下次再和他一起騎車,繼續探索單車運動的樂趣與沿途美麗的風景。
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